January 20th, 2006

Practice FSWE Essay 1

Please evaluate my practice FSWE essay.

The actual essay is evaluated from 1 to 12 with 12 being the highest score. I believe that last year the passing score was a 6.

I handwrote this essay in 50 minutes in accordance with the rules of the FSWE. I will present it without spellchecking or editing so to represent the actual essay as it was written.

When evaluating please be aware of the following:
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The topic:
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My essay:
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My outline:
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Some questions I have:
  • How big should the margins be when I write?
  • Will I be using a pen or a pencil? Will it be provided or be my own?


Please be critical. I want to improve my essay writing skills as much as I can for the test and beyond.

Thank you for your help.

Yours,
trv

Essay エッセイ

Journal for 2005-1-20 Fri..
Weather: Sunny Plan: Akagi JHS

I wrote a practice essay for the Foreign Service Written Exam today in my free time. In the test you have 50 minutes to handwrite a essay on a given topic, so I took the 50 minutes of 1st period and went to a quiet room and wrote. The topics for the essays are hard, so 50 minutes isn't much time to write. I barely finished in time. If you have time, please read the essay and comment on it.

平成17年1月20日の日記
天気: 晴 行事: 赤来中

今日のフリータイムでアメリカ合衆国外交官試験練習のためにエッセイを書きました。試験で50分手でエッセイを書かなければならないので、1時間目の50分で静かな部屋で手でエッセイを書きました。試験エッセイのテーマが難しいので50分はちょっと少ないだが、ギリギリ終わりました。よろしければ、読んでください

Today's Kanji
(今日の漢字)
Meaning (意味): field

Chinese Reading (音読み):
Reading Romaji
ya
Japanese Reading (訓読み):
Reading Romaji
no
Vocabulary (単語):
Word Reading Romaji Translation
nofield
野球やきゅうyakyuubaseball
野外やがいyagaioutskirts
野生やせいyaseiwild
野心やしんyashinambition
野蛮やばんyabansavage
荒野こうやkouyawasteland
粗野そやsoyarustic
視野しやshiyaoutlook


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Trevor Lalish-Menagh
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