February 28th, 2006

Practice FSWE Essay 2

Please evaluate my practice FSWE essay.

The actual essay is evaluated from 1 to 12 with 12 being the highest score. I believe that last year the passing score was a 6.

I handwrote this essay in 50 minutes in accordance with the rules of the FSWE. I will present it without spellchecking or editing so to represent the actual essay as it was written.

When evaluating please be aware of the following:
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Please be critical. I want to improve my essay writing skills as much as I can for the test and beyond.

Thank you for your help.

Yours,
trv

Application 申し込み書

Journal for 2005-2-28 Tue..
Weather: Cloudy Plan: Akagi JHS

I had a lot of different things to do today. I submitted my application for the 2006 JET Programme Tokyo Orientation Assistant position. I am in the middle of writing my application for the 2006 Re-contracting Conference Assistant position, but it is tougher to do. I practiced writing a 50-minute timed essay for the Foreign Service Written Exam in 4th period. If you have time, please read it and comment.

平成17年2月28日の日記
天気: 雲 行事: 赤来中

今日、たくさん色々な仕事をしました。2006JETプログラム来日オリエンテーション助手申し込み書を書き込みました。今,2006再契約者研修会助手申し込み書を書き中だが、オリエンテーションのより難しいと思います。4時間目、アメリカ合衆国外交官試験のために50分で書いたエッセイを書き練習しました。でければ、読んでコメントしてください。

Today's Kanji
(今日の漢字)
Meaning (意味): affection, love

Chinese Reading (音読み):
Reading Romaji
アイai
Vocabulary (単語):
Word Reading Romaji Translation
愛情あいじょうaijouaffection
愛用あいようaiyoufavorite
博愛はくあいhakuaicharity
恋愛れんあいren'ailove


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